Fernanda – # 7
June 24, 2009Botox injections should not be offered for free because many people will use without care about the side effects.
Nowadays everybody is looking more and more for news procedures for being always youth, and in the most of the cases without worry about the side effects that could be happen. In the last years Botox for cosmetic use became a new trend. Botox is a
substance that causes a disease, but when is used in very little portions is able to correct some changes that occurs in our body, for instance, crow’s feet. In otherwise, when we start to use BOTOX indiscriminately, could be transformed in a real problem because this use have a lot of side effects, like bruises, lack of facial expression , and weak muscles.
For example, Rosa Maria, who is a director at the company where I used to work for, have used Botox once in her crow’s feet, she loved the result and didn’t want wait the necessary time to do another application, as a consequence, her left eye stayed paralyzed for 4 or 5 months.
Therefore, Botox injections should not be offered for free.
Botox injections should not be offered for free because many people will use (them) without car(ing) about (its) side effects. Nowadays(,) everybody is looking for new procedures for being always you(ng), and in most cases(,) without (being)worr(ied) about the side effects that could happen. In the last years(,) Botox for cosmetic use (has) bec(O)me a new trend. (What people don’t know is that) Botox is a substance that causes a disease (which disease?), but when (it) is used in very little portions(, it) is able to correct some changes that occurs in our body, for instance, crow’s feet. (However,) when we start to use BOTOX indiscriminately, a problem (can really happen)because this use ha(s) a lot of side effects, like bruises, lack of facial expression , and weak muscles.
For example, Rosa Maria, who is a director at the company where I used to work for, used Botox once in her crow’s feet. (S)he loved the result and didn’t want (to) wait the necessary time to (have) another application. (As) a consequence, her left eye paralyzed for 4 or 5 months. Therefore, Botox injections should not be offered for free. (Hummm, maybe, what you are trying to say is that BOTOX should not be offered at all. What I think you should do is to revise this idea of BEING FREE, because it sends the reader the idea that you will be talking about financial issues.)
Rick
OK Rick, Tahnk you!
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