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Riad #7

June 9, 2009

Romantic relationship inside the workplace between two members of the staff could be a dangerous behavior. Everybody knows that singles don’t need to give any satisfaction to anybody about their private lives and every place is a good place for ”players”; however some considerations must be done, at first it is forbitten for a married person to stick with an affair because is unfair to the absent part of the couple and even when the relationship is not working anymore,;on the other hand , others workmates certainly would be gossiping with a dirty-minded way mantaining a bad mood in the workplace and that would be interfering with the good course of the job;at second,people who use to be together day after day,sharing the same goals , the same interesting and concerns could be attracted by eachother, it’s natural ;par example,doctors and nurses who have been working side by side for hours and hours saving lives, at the end ,sometimes feel an uncontrollable desire to stay together at the timeoff and that is the way that all happens. As I wrote before, between singles,there is no problem, however, showing affections like kisses or caress during the worktime are counterproductive, it’s badly seen by the customers and the other workers ,seeming lack of respect and that bevavior takes away from the mind the focus of the work. The question is, should be avoid dating with a workmate? I don’t think so but both must take care with their behavior and think:romance is a very good idea after the job and not during.

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  1. (Love) relationship(s) inside the workplace between two members of the staff could (constitute) dangerous behavior. (S)ingle (people) don’t need to (explain) their private lives (to anyone) and every place is a good place for ”players” (What do you mean by players?) (H)owever(,) some considerations must be (taken into account). (A)t first(,) it is forbidden for a married person to stick with an affair because (it) is unfair to the absent part of the couple and even when the relationship is not working anymore (Who says that? Who is dictating the rules here?)

    (O)n the other hand , other workmates would certainly be gossiping dirty-mindedly (about the couple)(,) mantaining a bad mood (describe this “bad mood”) in the workplace(,) (which) would interfer (in) the good course of the job

    (S)econd, people who (are) use(d) to be(ing) together day after day, sharing the same goals , the same interest(s) and concerns could be attracted by each other (What do you mean?)(I)t’s natural (What are you referring to?) (For) example, doctors and nurses who have been working side by side for hours and hours saving lives, at the end, sometimes feel an uncontrollable desire to stay together at the timeoff and that is the way that all happens (What do you mean by ALL?).

    As I wrote before (In English, Riad, you may not address the reader so directly like that.) (B)etween single (people), there is no problem (but you have just said that even between single people there would be a problem for them to be dating in the work place because people’s personal lives should be set asidefrom their professional one).

    (H)owever, showing affection like kisses or caress(es) during the work time (is)counterproductive (and) badly seen by the customers and the other workers, (functioning as lack of respect). (Such inappropriate behavior) takes (people’s concentration) away from the focus (on) the work.

    (In other words,) the question (remains whether people should avoid dating a workmate.) I don’t think so (Riad, you cannot right so directly to your readers like this.) but both must take care with their behavior and think: romance is a very good idea after the job and not during.

    (Riad, you should definetely revise this last paragraph. As we have discussed in class, a writer in English should never be wishy-washy. You MUST take a stand on the issue and defend that stand througut your paper.)

    Riad,

    I am not so sure this paper has the potential to become a portofolio paper. Maybe you should simply learn from the mistakes you have made on this one and focus on other more potential papers.

    Rick



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