Fernanda #5
May 26, 2009A five-year-old dark-haired girl, her big black eyes showing a lot of life, her long curly black hair with pigtails dancing in the air, her full mouth showing a friendly smile. She had a turned-up nose, which sometimes show her frolic attitude. She had a thin body. In spite of it all, she was full of energy,always oozing happiness, getting everyone’s attention.
A five-year-old dark-haired girl (would jump up and down, her) big black eyes (closed tighly shut), (her) long curly black hair (dancing in the air), her full mouth (showing her nearly toothless smile). (She had a )turned-up nose(, which sometimes faced difficulties hiding the boogers from her runny nose.) She (had) a thin body and sometimes look frail (for not receiving the nutrition it so much needed). (In spite of it all, she was) full of energy, always oozing hapiness, getting everyone’s attention
Fernanda,
As you can see, I have tried to add more action into your description. If you wish to turn this description in as part of your portofolio, you would have to turn a paper that looks something like this one.
Rick