Laura #5 — Description
May 21, 2009A well-builted man, my father went through life enchanting women. Tall considering his generation average hight he exercised a lot, wich gave him really strong legs and slim body. He had expressive atentive brown eyes, a beautiful small nose and a gentle smile, all well proportioned in his long face.
A well-built man, my father went through life enchanting women (I loved your first sentence
It really sets the tone of your paper 
). Tall, considering his generation average height, he exercised a lot, which gave him really strong legs and a slim body. He had expressive, attentive brown eyes, a beautiful small nose and a gentle smile, all well (distributed) in his long, (pale) face.
Laura,
This is excellent work! Although you have not written much, the quality of the material you have written so far is very high
Congratulations on the hard work!
Rick