Débora #5 – Description
May 21, 2009I´m a 32 year old woman with blond, chin-lenght (short is better, right?) hair. It´s not as straight as I wish but it´s fine. I have hazel eyes, turning from blue to green and sometimes to gray depending on my mood and the day.
My pink cheeks always denunciate how I´m feeling and definetely it´s not nice. Pimples come and go. I wish I could have full mouth like Angelina Jolie but I´m happy with my regular lips. I´m not slim but I can´t say I´m fat…so what can I say, I´m working out on this, because nobody deserves a flabby and fat body, right? Like peole say, You weren´t born like this.
I´m a 32 year old woman with blond, chin-length hair. It´s not as straight as I wish, but it´s fine. I have hazel eyes, turning from blue to green and sometimes to gray depending on my mood (I love your sense of humor
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My pink cheeks always (gives away my mood, which is not always so nice) (Nice is a very empty word. Try replacing it with a more vivid vocabulary word.) Pimples come and go (ha ha ha. I love that). I wish I could have a full mouth like Angelina Jolie, but I´m happy with my regular lips. I´m not slim, but I can´t say I´m fat. (Avoid the use of ellipsis at all cost.) (Just call me average.) I´m working on (it), because nobody deserves a flabby and fat body, right? Like peole say, “You weren´t born like this.”
Debora,
I really enjoyed reading your paper. I can totally see YOU in it
It is full of your sense of humor 
Now that we are moving on to a “freer” approach to writing, I believe your ideas will thrive! 
Rick