Paula #4 –
May 19, 2009The press and the media should not have the right to snoop into the lives of the celebrities. This kind of tireless invesgation has one goal: to increase the “market” for gossip news, a consequence of the entertainment industry, where teenagers are the main target of gossip columns, sometimes there are malicious comments
For instance, lady Diana’s accident in Paris is related to a hot pursuit of paparazzi to her car. Her driver lost the control of the car and a terrible accident happenned killing Princess Diana, her loved and the driver. This terrible acident shows that a public person is actually incurring risks and how guarded this person have to be. It also shows that these photographers have surpassed all the limits of what they are “allowed” to do while working. The papparazzi are not supposed to pursuit anyone, this is an invasion of privacy, a violation of a human being right.
The famous people have to establish a limit witch have to be respected by the media, otherwise there will be law penalties.
The press and the media should not have the right to snoop (into) the lives of celebrities. (This) kind of tireless invesgation has one goal: to increase the market (for) gossip, a consequence of the entertainment industry(, where) teenagers are the main target. Sometimes there are malicious comments. (For instance?)(Here, you need to guide your ideas as to link your topic sentence to the example of Lady Di below.)
(For instance,) Lady Diana(’s) accident in Paris is related to a hot pursuit of paparazzi to her car. Her driver lost the control of the car and a terrible accident happenned killing Princess Diana, her (lover) and the driver. It (it what?) shows that a public person is actually incurring risks and how guarded this person have to be (how guard does a person have to be?). It also shows that these photographers have surpassed all the limits of what they are “allowed” to do while working. (What are the guidelines? What is crossing the line in your point of view?)