Riad #3 – Nature X Nurture
May 12, 2009mental illness is a genetic diesease that it appears all over the world independent of the social class,education,religion,good relativies or not,enviroment or another thing that in society can change a person ;,par example,a lot of famous families as the former russian royal family had a lot of members with mental illness and other genetic ilness like hemofilia,that’s why a lot of diaseses cannot be cured by the doctors but only can be controlled by them.
Mental illness is a genetic diesease that (occurs) all over the world (regardless of) the (patient’s) social class, education (background), religious (beliefs), enviromental (factors) or any other (reason found in society) that (may) change a person. (For instance, a lot of famous families as the former Russian Royal family (have) had members (of their families plagued) with mental illness and other genetic (diseases) like hemophilia. That’s (What is the reason?) why a lot of diaseases cannot be cured by doctors, but only can be controlled by them.
Riad,
What is your topic sentence? What exactly are you trying to say here in this paragraph? What isyour central idea?
Rick