Fernanda #3 – Nature X Nurture
May 12, 2009A child could be born bad or good, this is your essence that cannot be changed by the enviroment.
A person who born bad not could be 100% good and vice versa.
The parents could try change this essence trough a healthy enviroment at home without fights and with the necessary attention, putting the child in the best school, making them to know good people, but even with that the essence still alive.
For example, Suzana Richtofen was very well educated by your parents and do not hesitate to kill them when she wants.
Everyone born with a particular essence and independent of how will be your life you will die with the same essence.
A child (can) be born (good or) bad, (and its)essence cannot be changed by the environment. A person who born bad (is not able to turn out to be) 100% good and vice versa (Who says that? What kind of evidence can you use to support these ideas?) (Parents can) try (to) change this essence (by providing) a healthy enviroment at home without fights and with the necessary attention, putting the child in the best school, (or) making them to (get to) know good people (Avoid the use of adjectives like good or bad because they do not add any meaning to your text), but even with (all this external input), the (child’s) essence (is) still alive. For example, Suzana Richtofen was very well educated by your (my parents?) parents and (did) not hesitate to kill them (for their fortune). (But who can guarantee that she has actually received a “good” education?) (Therefore,) everyone (is) born with a (individual)essence, and (regardless of how their lives turn out to be,) (they) will (eventually) die with the same essence.
Fernanda,
The two areas I would like you to focus on are: (1) basic grammar errors and (2) language sophistication.
Rick