Janaína – paper #4
October 29, 2008I have a 21 years old brother and, until 4 months ago, he was an obese guy weighting about 150 kilos. His light eyes and swollened nose gave him a pleasant but deformed face, so he used to turn the attention of the girls by creating different hair styles, from black-power to bald. Tired of being just a funny friend for the girls, in the beginning of the year he decided to pass trought a stomach reduction surgery that occurred in June. Since then, he lost about 55 quilos already. All this weight lost made him very flabby, but in the next months he will start practicing exercises to become the healthy muscular guy that girls admire. Another dream that he expects to realize after getting thin is to surf at the beach.
I have a 21 years old brother and until 4 months ago he was an obese guy weighting about 150 kilos. His light eyes and swollened nose gave him a pleasant but deformed face, so he used to get the girls’ attention by creating different hair styles, from black-power to bald. Tired of being just a funny friend for the girls, in the beginning of the year, he decided to undergo a stomach reduction surgery in June. Since then, he lost about 55 quilos already. All this weight lost made him very flabby, but in the next months, he will start practicing exercises to become the healthy muscular guy that girls admire. Another dream that he expects to realize after getting thin is to surf on the beach.
Janaina,
As I have already mentioned before, you may submit this paper as part of your portofolio. However, the end of it sounds a bit out there, without a sense of closure. I would like you to work on it a bit more in case you decided to turn this paper in for a grade.
Rick