Mah — Portofolio #3

Teaching adults how to read and write is a BLAH, necessary, and rewarding job. (I have changed the order of your paragraphs because rewarding sounds like a very strong reason for people to teach others how to read and write)

Second, teaching adults how to read and write is a necessary job. One of the mainly reasons why there are a lot of illiterate people around the world is the lack of oportunity of going to school for many different motives such as not having enough money to pay for it. To bridge this gap, for those who didn’t have this chance of attending school as a child, it is really important to have someone to teach them at least the the basics . Otherwise, it will be extremely hard for them to find a job that would provide them a satisfactory economic situation so that he/she is able to provide a solid education to his/her kids in the long run. For instance, Juliana Correa, a 35-years-old receptionist at a local gym, has never gone to school. She’s the daughter of a single mother who dropped out of school before high school because her mother couldn’t pay for her studies. And instead of trying to get a job to help her mother and in the future go back to school, she prefered to do nothing. When Juliana was born, the same ‘end’ was expected of her. But differently from her mother, she preferred to try to get a job to at least start a simple, but worthy life. By knocking at all the neighborhood doors, she met a woman called Giovana dos Santos who hired her to clean the garbage and to do most of the house chores everyday for a fair salary. At the age of 18, she had already saved up enough money to buy a really small room so she could have her own place and start her own life. At that time, she was working as Giovana’s daughter (I am assuming you have not finished this paper. Also, Marina, I am still not sure where you are going with this story because it sounds like it is far away from the original idea that teaching the basics is necessary in society. Make sure that the end of this paragraph links the example to the original idea.) 

(Where is your topic sentence #3?) Third, ….

When a person spends some time and energy to teach people the basics like reading and writing and he/she can see their evolution day by day and see how thankful they get, it’s one of the most rewarding and gratifing things in life. For instance, I’ve been teaching adults how to read for a couple of years, as a volunteer on my old school project. Last year, I had a student called Didi who worked as a made her whole life so she could have something to eat everyday and, because of needy, she has never been able to go to school. Now she’s almost 50 years old and decided to give herself a chance to learn how to read. In the beginning she was really shy, somedays I couldn’t even listen to her voice but not because it was lowd but because she didn’t speak at all. She was shame of herself. So once I talked to her, tried to encourage her to practice her reading skills in front of everybody because they were all there to learn just like her, told her she was doing pretty well and somehow I helped her increase herself self-esteem. From that day on,  she’s been doing her best to read better and better. And just seeing that smile on her face whenever she started reading big texts without any help, was the best thing in the world. The thing is that no matter how much adults reading and writing skills evolute, it always give them and the teacher one of the best feelings ever.

Teaching adults how to read and write is a really rewarding, necessary and … job. When a person spend some time and energy to teach people basic things like read and he/she can see their evolution day by day and see how thankful they get, it’s one of the most rewarding and gratifing things in life. For instance, I’ve been teaching adults how to read for a couple of years, as a volunteer on my old school project. Last year, I had a student called Didi who worked as a made her whole life so she could have something to eat everyday and, because of needy, she has never been able to go to school. Now she’s almost 50 years old and decided to give herself a chance to learn how to read. In the beginning she was really shy, somedays I couldn’t even listen to her voice but not because it was lowd but because she didn’t speak at all. She was shame of herself. So once I talked to her, tried to encourage her to practice her reading skills in front of everybody because they were all there to learn just like her, told her she was doing pretty well and somehow I helped her increase herself self-esteem. From that day on,  she’s been doing her best to read better and better. And just seeing that smile on her face whenever she started reading big texts without any help, was the best thing in the world. The thing is that no matter how much adults reading and writing skills evolute, it always give them and the teacher one of the best feelings ever.

Teaching adults how to read and write is also a necessary job. One of the mainly reason why there’s a lot of illiterates all around the world is lack of oportunity of going to school for many different motives such as not having enough money to pay it. So, for those who didn’t have this chance of attending school when a child, is really important to have someone to teach them at least the basic things. Otherwise, it will be extremely hard for them to find a job that would provide this person a satisfactory economic situation so he/she would be able to provide good education for his/her kids in the long run. For instance, Juliana Correa, a 35-years-old receptionist has never gone to school. She’s daughter of a single mother who dropped school before high school because her mother couldn’t pay for her studies. And instead of trying getting a job to help her mother and in the future go back to school, she prefered to do nothing. When Juliana was born, it was predicted the same ‘end’ to her. But different from her mother, she rather tried to get a job to at least start a simple but worthy life. By knocking at all the neighborhood doors she met a women called Giovana dos Santos who contracted her to clean the garbage and to do most of the house chores everyday for a fair salary. At the age of 18 years old she had already saved enough money to buy a really small room so she could have her own place and start her own life. At that time she was working as Giovana’s daughter